According to the current economical situation and due to my background in the field, I would choose to purchase a business. I am a young and energetic person who studies bioinformatics after the Molecular Biology and Genetic bachelor's degree. Therefore, I would open a local genetic test center that holds the motivation to contribute to current research and applies genetic tests for health.
Firstly, my local hometown is a small developing city. Although it is located near a large city, most people in my hometown couldn't afford to travel this distance for such genetic tests, which are not available currently in my hometown. In this way, people could get easy access to genetic tests locally. For example, my uncle had twins and he and his wife needed to take a genetic test, karyotyping its called, to understand if the babies had any genetic disease such as down syndrome. Unfortunately, one of them was diagnosed with down syndrome. Anyway, since these samples are delicate, my uncle should travel 2 hours journey just to drop off the sample that the nurses just took from the prenatal chord. If we had a local clinic for this purpose, it would be much more efficient for pregnant women in my hometown. Additionally, in this center, we could offer a wide range of tests at affordable costs for all pregnant women. Thus, the parents could be aware of the genetic disorders that their children have.
Secondly, I have proficiency in this field especially. In my last year of my bachelor's, thanks to my professor at that time, I received real patient genomes to conduct a series of rare genetic disorder projects, under ethical conditions, to understand which genes are responsible for these diseases. Additionally, in the earlier years of my bachelor's, I performed most of these genetics tests by myself. Thus, I know the qualifications of an employee needed to perform these tests, while I run the business. Furthermore, for my master's study, I am working in the prostate cancer research field which offers me lots of opportunities to understand the disease and analyze the different patient chords. However, although the survival rate is so low for this disease, cancer funds are very limited in my area. Hence, I would like to contribute to local research groups by providing some tests that they commonly use, such as sequencing or microarray.
Overall, if I have enough money to invest, I won't think of a second and purchase a local genetic test center that professes in prenatal test kits and ease the studies of local research groups. Therefore, both parents became aware their children's health, and local research could be improved.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99774266366 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76491176048 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539503386005 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4125834631 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.428571429 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0711137566341 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243988016077 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357445711748 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.057263812992 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249569404409 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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