You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer
Having enough money as a gift and having the opportunity to choose the way to spend the money I would certainly buy tickets to a concert that I wanted to watch.
Firsttly, going to the concert I would be accomplishing my dream goal. For example, I have always dreamt of going to any concert but, I have never had the chance to do so due to the paucity of money. Besides, the shows which I wanted to see were very expensive and I ended up staying home waiting for the dvd media.
Secondly, attending the concert might provide me the opportunity to play with the band. For instance, I am an electric guitar player and I have a band which plays in small bars. Moreover, sometimes, I play some covers with others friends band. Thus, I could have the chance to play some of the band songs and try to become famous.
However, I somehow would like to buy a piece of jewelry. Even though I am not rich, the piece of jewelry could make me appear a rich man and probably many women might approuch me. Therefore, I could not only be engaged in a relationship but, also, I could marry a woman.
Finally, watching the show and playing with the band would be the greatest ways to spend a gifted money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
.... Thus, I could have the chance to play some of the band songs and try to become famous. H...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'gifted money'.
Suggestion: gifted money
...and would be the greatest ways to spend a gifted money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 969.0 1977.66487455 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 223.0 407.700716846 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34529147982 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38986108028 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 212.727598566 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551569506726 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 618.680645161 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4175219813 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.75 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201186434493 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766829139701 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084889356816 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128342832385 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947039407731 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.95 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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