You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
When people possess more money or were given them in a form of a present, they are prone to spend it for various of ways. It strongly depends on the personality one individual has. If I were given money I would definitely spend it for buying a ticket to attend the concert I have craved for. There are two reasons for my opinion, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, there is nothing more valuable than one experience in your life. Being at a concert, exploring a land, or making other adventurous activities has stronger effect and intensify your emotions much more than a pleasure of having expensive object. I would give an exemplification with me 7 years ago, when I gathered allowance in order to buy a ticket for a famous group jazz group which organized a concert in my city. Therefore, I denied myself of buying a extra clothes or expensive perfumes 1 years in order to save for the concert. As a result I am not regret for what I did, because the feeling I experienced was indescribable. If I had bought expensive objects, I could not have been so exhilarated
Moreover, the choice people make buy spending a gift money for luxury products like jewelry is erroneous, due to the amortization of the items or often they become out of trend. Consequently, they will not bring delight anymore, which lead to desire for a new ones. In contrast, attending to a concert will keep a person remembering the moment for long time, cause this is something which can not be removed or vanished from your memories.
In conclusion I would say that the choice attending a concert is better due to the emotional and pleasant effect that has on human. Another reason to prefer concert over buying a jewelry is that second will bored us after time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6380952381 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72803534998 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584126984127 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2859730842 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.357142857 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195600504679 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067268876072 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536589711231 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126208069407 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121555023618 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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