You have received a gift of money The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend Which would you buy Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

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You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

If I get money as a gift and it is sufficient to buy a piece of jewelry or tickets to a concert then I would like to buy jewelry. There are mainly three reasons that come to mind which force me to take that decision.

First, jewelry is an asset which we can liquefy to use money in urgent work. It is a perfect investment which helps a lot in the future. For example, in India several people buy gold jewelry as per saving of money. Whenever any emergency situations arise they sell or mortgage the jewelry and get money and sometimes they get more than the purchase price of it because of the rise in value of metal in the market.

Second,everyone has their own choices and they make decisions according to it. Such as
I am fond of jewelry and dresses so I prefer any ornament which I can buy in that amount of money or I can add some amount from my side also to buy my choice’s jewelry. My reasoning behind my choice is concerts are one time enjoyment whereas I can wear jewelry multiple times at different parties.

Third, music concerts can be enjoyed online or on television but we can not buy virtual jewelry or ornaments. Usually these concerts are very crowded and I do not like to become a part of the crowd so I generally watch live streamlines on television or the internet. This is also one reason to invest gift money in jewelry.

Finally, these are the main three reasons which push me to buy jewelry and make the money secure.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, third, whereas, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1188.0 1977.66487455 60% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45402164257 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548148148148 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.832656492 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3846153846 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25523505674 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100023759904 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083705664821 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140788000498 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852010015737 0.0645574589148 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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