Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Enjoyment cannot be defined from a single individual's experience. Definition of enjoyment can vary from person to person. Simillarly, some people might agree to the fact that young people enjoy life more than older people do, while others may refute to this. I conisder that life can be enjoyed entirely and not at any specific age.
First, different people enjoy life in different ways. Young children love spending most of their time playing in playground or playing video games at home. These activities are a form of enjoyment for them. They might think that is this is the best way to enjoy life and people of other age are missing this enjoyment. Indeed, this may not be true. For instance, adults might consider spending time playing games childish. These adults might think going on vaccation and exploring places is more fun and is a real form of enjoyment.
Second, young people may never get to experience and enjoy the way of life older people might have lived. Older people might have had enjoyed their life when they were younger. They might have already enjoyed more than the younger people could ever imagine. For example, a sailor loves travelling around the world might have had experienced and enjoyed more than a young individual who has never travelled abroad. In contrast, the young individual may have had enjoyed more in his country than the sailor might have overseas in his lifetime. This explains that enjoyment can not be a measured and compared between people of different ages afterall.
Finally, different generations have different things to enjoy. It might be really fun to spend time in park few decades ago. This activity may not be followed in the modern times. However, there might be different trend tomorrow than it is today. Times change and so do they ways in which people enjoy their life. Consider the example that in 1990s people used to enjoy peaceful and calm music over rock. But this might not be the case today. Nowadays, people might be more fond of rock music than slow music. Maybe people in future turn out to enjoy calm music and not rock. But this does not change the definition of enjoyment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 640, Rule ID: AFTERALL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: after all
...mpared between people of different ages afterall. Finally, different generations ha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 341, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
...y their life. Consider the example that in 1990s people used to enjoy peaceful and calm ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86178861789 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28586890311 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476964769648 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1715261075 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.4444444444 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85185185185 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484405313892 0.236089414692 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144926761556 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150940662745 0.0737576698707 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.348138105167 0.150856017488 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117849735254 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.