Young people enjoy life more than older people do

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Young people enjoy life more than older people do.

The prompt says that youth who are usually enjoy life more than elderly people. In my opinion, that statement doesn't true for many reason.
To feel happy and enjoy life it depends on how that one thinks and feels. Therefore, happiness and enjoying live mainly realted to the personality itself not the age.

To begin, if someone suffer a specific disease, which prevents him from participates his life properly. It doesn't matter how old is he, isn't? If that person young or old he will not find the comfort to enjoy his life. However, if that one an old man, but he is interested in doing sports and playing tennis or football, of course, he will be more healthier and happier than that young one who is smoking with respiratory disease.

Furthermore, success is a key of enjoying life and happiness. If a young man doesn't achieve any accomplishment in his life and never taste the success, How dose he like his life and enjoy it? The answer is never feel that feeling. On the other hand, for example, if we look at Kentacky resaurents' series, we will find that the most successful restaurant in the world was belong to an old man started his project while he was 60. Therefore, age is not related to the way we enjoy our lives. That man, Kentacky's owner, when he started his project no one believed him and that he would be one day such famous. Such success would bring him happiness and thus, life' enjoyment.

Furthermore, most of the renowened-business men around the world are elderly people, that illustrates that old people enjoy their lives and can achieve accomplishments. For instance, Elon Mask, the famous business man who invented the auto-drive car. One day I listened to that person in an interview, he talked about how he enjoying his life by reaching every day a new dream that he have been dreaming for years. Thus, happiness is not for a specific age.
Therefore, whether the one is young or old it is not germane to how that one feels and enjoys his life. To feel happy and enjoy, it depends on the internal construing to the life meaning, and what we should do to feel that life's happiness.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
... prompt says that youth who are usually enjoy life more than elderly people. In my op...
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Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y people. In my opinion, that statement doesnt true for many reason. To feel happy an...
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Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...opinion, that statement doesnt true for many reason. To feel happy and enjoy life it depen...
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Line 4, column 22, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suffers'.
Suggestion: suffers
...lf not the age. To begin, if someone suffer a specific disease, which prevents him ...
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Line 4, column 108, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...from participates his life properly. It doesnt matter how old is he, isnt? If that per...
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Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...operly. It doesnt matter how old is he, isnt? If that person young or old he will no...
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Line 4, column 343, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...nnis or football, of course, he will be more healthier and happier than that young one who is ...
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Line 6, column 78, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ying life and happiness. If a young man doesnt achieve any accomplishment in his life ...
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Line 6, column 213, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'felt'.
Suggestion: felt
... life and enjoy it? The answer is never feel that feeling. On the other hand, for ex...
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Line 6, column 372, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
... successful restaurant in the world was belong to an old man started his project while...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, of course, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63395225464 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58102044049 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493368700265 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8713992443 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1904761905 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9523809524 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244560571478 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769884692668 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696451501265 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138916971076 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367800962951 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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