Who does not want to enjoy in their life? I think everyone right! I personally believe that enjoyment or being happy does not count age or any other thing. It is a personnel choice. Many old people live are very happy in their life while many young people are not. Age is just the number.
To begin with, I know many people, who are in my grandfather" age but they love participating adventurous thing even they enjoy traveling. For example, I went on a family trip to Kathmandu last year. We went to a famous temple there, that was quite far from our hotel room and we decided to go walking because of some religious perspective. We all got tired and exhausted but my grandmother, she was so enjoying that walking. At every five minutes she used to put some poor joke and he was laughing like hell. Even, got inspired my grandmother's attitude towards life. In all the trip she was the one who enjoys the most.
Furthermore, many people argue that because of technology we have more opportunity for entertainment or making life more fun. That's true but nowadays people having more stress than before. They are not enjoying as many old people do. For example " watching the movie" . What I do whenever I fell bore while watching the scene I just forward it and consequently miss some of important scene lastly I conclude it I didn't enjoy it. And I know many more young people who do the same. However, the old people they don't forward it they have patience they watch it every single scene and I saw them watching they enjoy it fullest. Even my grandfather used to remember some of the dialogue and in dinner, he used to tell us just to make us happy and laugh.
In short, I strongly oppose this statement by giving an example of my grand parent's philosophy towards life. Doesn't matter how much entertainment stuff you have ultimately it's "your heart " that need to feel the enjoyment. If have to feel your happiness inside. So the age doesn't matter at all. The Heart can be still " young always"and it can enjoy as much it wants.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, lastly, so, still, while, for example, i think, in short, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60107816712 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6046972231 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55525606469 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.182248603 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.28 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.84 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259667600018 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745815937576 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101064906615 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144885579682 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103397727026 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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