When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

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When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?

School education plays a significant role in the development of children. A school must include all the necessary courses which affect the children's physical and mental development the most. Therefore, if I had to choose one subject then I will choose physical education and I will eliminate art and music classes. I Personally believe physical education should be a mandatory course in every school sway for several reasons which I will explore in the essay.

To begin with, as far as I know," a healthy body has a healthy mind'. Physical education is very advantageous in maintaining good health not only in children also in adults. For example, when I was in school, our course curriculum has physical training in the morning. This class was very beneficial for every student in terms of relaxing and refreshment. We used to feel very active and energetic after the physical training session. Additionally, physical education also motivates many students to do yoga and exercise daily. Our bodies should be respected and treated well to do well function. If our body will be stronger and healthy then only our brain could work efficiently. Suppose if I have pain in my back then I can not seat and study for a longer time. Thus, it is very important to take care of our health. I feel that this is why physical education should not be optional but mandatory.

Morever, art and music have another advantage no doubt but it can be learned in later stages of life. For example, My mommy is taking music classes, she is learning classical Indian music. There is no age limit to study art and music. Beside this, any student doesn't like to study art and music. For example, I am a good example of it. When I was in class sixth, we have art class on a daily basis and for me, it was a huge burden. Hence, art and music classes can be optional.

In conclusion, physical education has a crucial role in the development of a child so it must be included in every school as an important course. However, art and music classes are like a hobby, students can learn it if interested in later stages of life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69086021505 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65054717658 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486559139785 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8566519086 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.7083333333 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301699238984 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856503547013 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656769083312 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181197007052 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344576125232 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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