Young people tend to enjoy life more than older people
Humans, like any other living being, go through a process of development thorughout their life cycle. We start as young, inmature creatures who gradually evolve and try to reach our full potential as individuals. In the course of this evolving, we accumulate experience as we interact with a wide array of environments and people through our lives. This experience not only means that we are better prepared to react to an specific situation, but also usually means that we get to know ourselves more than anyone. This knowledge of ourselves is translated into an enhanced ability to understand what we really want from life and how to get it, which in a way, can be understood as living life to the fullest.
Young individuals have all the energy and time to pursue their goals, but except for a few notable "old souls", we don't really know what we want from life at that point. We may have more friends and go to more parties, but when we are young we often find ourselves doing things that we don't really want to do, sometimes due to peer pressure, sometimes because of our own insecurities. Because we don't know what we really want, we let ourselves to be drifted by life intead of pursuing what we are pasionated about, and that frequently leads to unhappiness.
Old people, on the other hand, more often than not know what they want, and they don't allow peer pressure or their insecurities to get in the way of getting them. Although is true that with age come more responsibilities, old individuals are also wise enough to setting aside a time and space for themselves. This is particularly true when we reach the age of retirement, at which point we no longer have the pressure of our regular jobs in the way. Once we reach that age, we usually have a family, a wide group of people and friends to interact with, retirenment money and enough knowledge about ourselves to know what makes us feel good in life.
I would say then that although young people may have the time and energy for enjoying life, is old people who really are in a better position to do so. The knowledge about our needs and how to satisfy them that we gain thorugh our lives is what ultimately allow us to be free as individuals and really achieve satisfaction from our lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, then, except for, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63861386139 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62538713004 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477722772277 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.6214858498 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.857142857 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157061732133 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669391010412 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679379975719 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117815561436 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407330458641 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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