Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
Throughout the history of mankind, individuals have been concerning the future of the society. One specific strata of the society, who are very eager to influence their future, are the young people. Some people believe that in today's modern world, the young are able to make decisions to affect the future of society, while the others disagree. I am in agreement with the former group. I will explore my reasons in the following.
First and foremost, from a political point of view, the young can effectively influence the future of society by voting. The future of modern societies is formed to a great extent through voting. As a matter of fact, in many countries young people are able to vote when they are 18 years old. This right gives them a chance to influence the future of the society by selecting appropriate candidates. I remember when I was an undergraduate student I was very excited to be able to vote in a presidential election. I just started to read political articles on websites and newspapers and I was excited to such an extent that I debated with other students and even my professors over political issues. Voting right made me feel that I can influence the future of society in a positive way. If I had not had the chance of participating in the elections, I could not have been influenced the future. That is why I think that young people are able to affect the future by their decisions.
What is more, the advent of internet has made it possible for the young to express their opinions and influence the other strata of the society in order to make right decisions that are essential for the future of society. In the past centuries, only a few elites were able to express their opinions to a large group of people by writing books and articles. However, nowadays internet has been widely used by the youth since its invention. By using the internet, young individuals are able to discuss their personal opinions in their own websites or weblogs and they can have a great influence on their readers. Hence, I believe that the modern world enhances the young's ability to influence the future of the society.
To put it in a nutshell, I absolutely believe that the young generation of today's contemporary world is able to change their future through expressing their notions and making decisions. Not only does the right to vote enable them to affect the future, but also the recent advances in the electronic world enhance their influence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...he history of mankind, individuals have been concerning the future of the society. One specific...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 769, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t I can influence the future of society in a positive way. If I had not had the chance of partici...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, while, i think, as a matter of fact, what is more, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74186046512 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62420092656 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446511627907 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2276178343 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0952380952 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237293619474 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791629130157 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602039388824 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150270406375 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537927695288 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.