Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
Decisions are very important part of our lives. We should be selected our way of life by them, so they have significant role. Some people believe that young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the society. Others disagree. In my view, young people should be used in taking important decisions for two reasons.
The main reason is that young people have more up to date and effective idea that could be useful. They are big part of the society that connected with new problems of society. When you give a chance to them, they have ability to change problematic parts more effectively. For example, my brother always had problem with method of teaching when he was student. He complained about serious atmosphere that schools have. He became a teacher when he was only 22 years. He always used entertaining methods to absorb students to study. At first, other older teachers didn’t believe him and debating him all the time. After a while, his class grades became more better and he gain a lot of success. All the students wanted to be in his class because of learning better and have fun. As you can clearly see, young people have more effective ideas.
Another reason is that they should have chance to gain experience and transmit it to next generation. The success of our future generation depends on how we transmit our experience to them. For instance, when I was young, I applied for a job that had a lot of fans. My boss was a very good person. He spent a lot of his time with me to taught every detail of the job to me. I had alotof faults at first but he always was paitiant. Now, I am very successful. I can’t have any of my success without him. My life was changed by him and I decide to continue his way.
This taught me that by giving chance to young people we can survive our future generation.
In sum, young people should be used in important part of the society. Not only could it be useful for next generation but also they have more effective ideas. Giving chance to young people should be attended in all societies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 466, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...me a teacher when he was only 22 years. He always used entertaining methods to abs...
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Line 2, column 656, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... After a while, his class grades became more better and he gain a lot of success. All the s...
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Line 2, column 675, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gains'.
Suggestion: gains
... class grades became more better and he gain a lot of success. All the students want...
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Line 2, column 761, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... to be in his class because of learning better and have fun. As you can clearly see, y...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...me. I had alotof faults at first but he always was paitiant. Now, I am very successful. I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56084656085 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43435122766 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470899470899 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.9694117401 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.5714285714 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235206226496 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663942958694 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104938283041 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154391417807 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109177500258 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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