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The youngsters have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is utterly important to educate them and broaden their horizon because they can lead our nation to progress. Moreover, they are the power of their communities. Thus, if they are highly educated and socialize persons, this will reflect positively on their future personalities. However, due to the new technological development that happens within the contemporary era, they squander most of their time in tempting to use the new innovations. Hence, they do not provide the societies with benefits. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my opinion more clearly.
To begin with, it is critical to establish the solid foundation of learning from early ages because this can help the young generations to fulfill their goals. Indeed, they are more receptive to knowledge than the older kids because they are like a sponge having the aptitude to absorb the information quickly and effectively. However, they are very obsessive in being up to date with the new devices and that what distract their minds from the teacher's valuable lessons. For instance, they tend to use these gadgets at an inappropriate time such as during the class. Thus, this will create a toxic atmosphere that will surge their peers to imitate their disruptive behavior which will, in turn, have a negative impact on their studying career. In addition, they do not have enough time to endow their societies with any help such as helping the homeless or cleaning the beach from the trashes. In contrast, children in the past and before these new innovations, they spend most of their leisure time in improving their educational level that will have a great influence on their countries future.
Second, the communication skills of the children have a vital role in helping them to achieve their dreams and guiding their communities toward impressive success. Indeed, if they will deal effectively with each other, this will have a positive impact on their future workflow and their countries revenue. For example, at the school, the teachers create a friendlier atmosphere that helps the students to express themselves easily and clearly. In addition, they provide them with a cooperative environment that will assist them to learn how to cooperate effectively and collaborate efficiently. Thus, such a collaborative environment will enhance their communication skills immensely. On the other hand, these days, the kids sway to be isolated because they are spending most of their time in using their smartphones for checking their social media or watching video games rather than contact the people surrounding them.Thus, they are more vulnerable to face a lot of obstacles because they lack such skills. As a result, this defect in the social skills will reflect negatively on the communities progress.
To sum up, children in a modern life have less hand in their communities success due to the new technology that squanders their spare time. Hopefully, parents do not purchase these gadgets for them until they become more mature and able to manage their priorities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 922, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...han contact the people surrounding them.Thus, they are more vulnerable to face a lot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18972332016 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76960614172 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50395256917 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6224854639 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.173913043 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26086956522 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0673589921478 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0245900775119 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242786315719 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.046971450963 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172437164786 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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