Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
Parents have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to value and appreciated them because the render the best word of advice especially when their kids are in dilemma because they are biased by their love for their children as they are deemed as a core motive for them, they guide them and provide them with the beneficial information that is the outcome of their long life and knowledge. However, due to the difficulty of life, the parent sway to spend most of their time working to secure their children's future life. Therefore, I believe that their leisure time should be consumed to educate their children beside practicing some sports due to its benefits in both of improving their kid's educational level and preserving their body health.
To begin with, it is critical to establish the solid foundation of learning from an early age because this can guide the young generation toward progress. Indeed, the parents can assist them to do so because they are deceived as a role model for their children as they endow them with basic and fundamental data and surge them to achieve their success. For instance, the kids at a young age are more receptive to acquire knowledge because they are like sponge able to absorb the information quickly and effectively. Thus, parents should eagerly seek to encourage them and aid them to improve their intellectual abilities by spending their spare time with helping them in doing their homework which will, in turn, widen their horizon. In contrast, if the guardian is not involved with their kids' education, their offsprings will suffer a lot because they will have a limited amount of information which will reflect negatively on their study career. Consequently, parents have the crucial role in refining the studying skills and help them thrive easily in a community.
Second, the role of mothers and fathers is essential in building the concrete basis of the communication skills. In fact, they should spend their free time in advocating them to perform some sports games as this will protect their bodies from many leading causes of death and enhance the social skills. For example, as we all know, most of the sports games are teamwork based, so the members must deal effectively with each other in order to reach their goal which is could be achieved if they will cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively. Thus, such a collaborative environment will enhance their interpersonal relationships immensely which have an imperative impact on their future workflow and productivity. In conclusion, it is crucial to practice sport on regular basis to improve the body health and enhance the social skills.
To sum up, the children should be aided by their parents in both of their studying and sports practice because these two ways will have an indispensable role in their future progress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03958333333 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6469116897 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49375 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9785984244 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.1875 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220891490135 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080137332748 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539221807271 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146270772808 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415732124497 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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