Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose?

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Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose?

Celebrities are the epitome of success for many thanks to the publicity they receive from social media and are, more often than not, imitated by those who have an insatiable desire for fame. Although they are widely adored by all people, not all people are influenced by them equally. In fact, in every society all around the globe there are famous people who lived in past and now they have great impact on public. Arguably, most of the time government decide to build a monument in order to appreciate celebrities. As my point of view, Cyrus, king of the Persia is one that his statue should be built in our country. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.

To commence, Cyrus is one of the influential kings who brings peace and quiet to the world and vast majorities of people not only in my country but also every corners of the world are respectful toward his attitude. As far as I am concerned, he established the most magnificent empire in the world and many people know him as a king of Persia. Cyrus conquered most of the land in the world especially in central of Asia and it's noteworthy that he respected the customs and religions of the land he conquered. Indeed, his respect toward human right should be reminded for today's people.

Secondly, inscription of Cyrus is a symbol of peace, which is from 6th century BCE and now it's in British museum. Actually, the text written on the inscription is all about human right and explain how Cyrus respect human beings. In this case, crowds of people know him as a symbol of peace and human right in the world. In other word, authorities in the world are trying to define rules related to human in order to preserve human rights. In this case, most of those rules can be stemmed from Cyrus inscription. I am of the opinion that building his monument can greatly contributes to the peace and tranquility not only in my country but also all over the world.

Last, but not the least, is politic and military strategy. In fact, the methods and strategies which Cyrus had used inspire whole people in my country. Some people say that how it's possible without advancement of technology or even paucity of knowledge. Arguably, in today's hectic world, hardly military forces improve without facilities and knowledge. As a corollary, building Cyrus statue can remind people of his achievement in military service, politics and human rights and so forth.

To wrap it up, building a monument of well-known people can evokes historical events in every country. Contemplating all the aforementioned reason one soon realize that Cyrus is one of the greatest person that his statue need to be built in our society because of his achievement in different realm.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...uman in order to preserve human rights. In this case, most of those rules can be s...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of his achievement in different realm.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'well', 'in fact']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246653919694 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.116634799235 0.158761421928 73% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0879541108987 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.057361376673 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0554493307839 0.0685040099705 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.152963671128 0.118717715034 129% => OK
Participles: 0.0286806883365 0.0351676179071 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60068262933 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0210325047801 0.0309702414327 68% => OK
Particles: 0.0019120458891 0.00188951952338 101% => OK
Determiners: 0.0898661567878 0.0887237588012 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0133843212237 0.0209618222197 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0133843212237 0.0139019557991 96% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2750.0 2387.08602151 115% => OK
No of words: 475.0 408.028673835 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78947368421 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338947368421 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229473684211 0.251872472559 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151578947368 0.174417080927 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103157894737 0.112833075102 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60068262933 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482105263158 0.524397521467 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 55.089482069 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.652173913 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0332982954 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.565217391 120.699889404 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.391304347826 0.644075263715 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.5995423341 45.7405998639 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.86666666667 1.45489161554 128% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143161592721 0.300154397459 48% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109172703115 0.103427244359 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0687828185392 0.0752933317313 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.50843789368 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140408338296 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627256959142 0.114077575197 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585650440491 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.437574131962 0.336927656856 130% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.116462091984 0.067059652881 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110532879711 0.210909579961 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378476070257 0.0618886996521 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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