Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that movies and television are the major hobbies of vast majorities of human beings and after stressful and boring days of works they might be overriding. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether watching TV or movies have pernicious effects on people's behavior or not. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that although they might fill our leisure time, they are not beneficial at all for people in any age. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues on this subject.
Since the dawn of civilization, humans have been putting their effort so as to find suitable hobbies in order to fulfill their free time. Indeed, in today's hectic city of life, TV and movies are of utmost important hobbies for crowds of people but they might not be informed of their consequences. Generally phrased, although informative, watching Telly or movies might be waste of time. As a tangible example, in order to have a flourished society or a nation, members of that society should be informed and knowledgeable or even experienced to reach the goal. If people spend their precious time watching movies or Telly, we will soon witness a lagging society owing to the fact that not until humans enhance their information and knowledge can the social progress. To elucidate more on this issue, not only can movies and television inhibit learning and knowledge but also can cause some unfavorable consequences throughout the society.
Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance is the fact that movies and television might have deleterious effects on people health and prevent people from leading a salubrious life. If we take a minute to ponder over it, we all know that radiations emitted by the screen are harmful to eyesight, especially for children. So, these radiations could attenuate the eyesight in the long-run. Going into the depth, movies and TV can destroy people's behavior not only physically but also mentally. For instance, myriads of celebrities present on the screen in a negative way and they do not make a secret of immoral behaviors. So, people might think that these behaviors are acceptable and start to mimic.
However, this is the side effect of a coin. Arguably, watching TV or movies could be really informative for individuals and they can get much information from TV like documentaries about history, animals, culture and so forth. In this situation, we could witness a positive effect on humans' lives. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my point of view.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, really, so, as to, for instance, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96405919662 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71726534742 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526427061311 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.381042398 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.80952381 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5238095238 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175378083447 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530850349903 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048751193333 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891042549417 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514304672531 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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