Your city is trying to construct a new building in order to attract more tourists Which do you think would be the best tourist attraction A historical museum A shopping mall An indoor amusement park Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Your city is trying to construct a new building in order to attract more tourists. Which do you think would be the best tourist attraction?
A historical museum
A shopping mall
An indoor amusement park
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The happiness of a country is measured by how much wealthy that country is. Taking about the attraction for the tourism sector, I would rather prefer building more of a historical museum than any other things. And this is mainly because of several reasons which I will elucidate below.
First of all, talking about human beings, it is more likely for them to be attracted by the kind of culture which are new to them. Beside from their own rituals and cultures, talking about tourists, they are more of a kind of explorer who went to other country and then regarded as tourists or a guests who are mostly interested towards new environment. They mostly wants to explore new things and if there would be one of the historical museum then it would be better for the tourists to explore most of the them in one place. For instance, let us take an example of internal tourists. They are the one who love to travel to the places of their own country where they might have never been to. It's a human nature that, when you travel to the place where you've never been to before, then you are likely to be attracted by the nature, culture and the rituals of that particular surrounding.
Moreover, the tourism sector is mainly established to have a good amount of profit and economical growth for the country. And then tourists are always searching for the things to be explored which they have never seen before. So, if there would've been a museum that includes each and every historical remnant, then the tourist would be spending a quality of times exploring that particular area rather than roaming here and there. My personal experience is the best example for this. When I was in standard 9, I went to the historical place and also a museum called "Narayanhiti Palace" with some of my friends. I was stunned by the vintage kind of things over there. Different types of old and very profound sculpture were placed over there, and I was very happy to witness those archaic stuff in front of me.
So, in conclusion, it is more likely for the tourists to be attracted by the historical museum, which they've not been to before and this is because most of the things out there are completely new to them which they might have not seen before.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, talking about, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60099750623 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46435020521 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463840399002 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8553260671 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.529411765 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5882352941 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21495014897 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07070132308 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599965782951 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149946370877 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337710271058 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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