Your friend has decided to switch careers, but isn’t sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response.
Some people even experts argue that young people should look outwards that is towards the market demands, job opportunities and choose a careers based on these points. However, I strongly disagree with such view points and argue that the choice of career or switching of career should be a decision made after looking inwards that is after looking for personal interest and passion in the career to be pursued and support by viewpoint by giving two examples.
First of all, the decision of career switching is an important decision in any person’s life and therefore has to be given prime importance. The decision has to be made considering the long term goals and passion and not the current scenario because the market is very dynamic in nature. What is considered as a good job in the present times will be obsolete in the near future. To survive this fall and rise of market, it is necessary that the person should have passion. For example, advent of the 2nd world war was market growing demand of nuclear scientists bit now considering its adverse effects on nature and health, it is not considered to be in great demand. The above example very clearly indicates that if this decision was made based on outwards points then the switching of careers has to be done more frequently which is undesired. If the decision is taken based on the passion that is by looking inwards then if the market changes because the person likes the subject and path of career, he or she will continue to work thus making the decision very effective.
Secondly, it is also important for the person to be happy in the career that is chosen because then the happiness index of the person will be high and he or she will choose to stick to this career even if fluctuations are seen or the market is disrupted. For instance, I wanted to pursue organic chemistry and while doing so I feel happy thus increasing my interest in the subject even more , on the other hand , if a person who had passion for marketing but is still working for an IT firm as a coder will not fulfill the duties or responsibilities assigned to the individual and thus gets into the list of inefficient employee. The above example very clearly states that the choice of career and the decision to change the career should be made considering the happiness of the individual to sustain in the path for long runs and helps to grab opportunities whenever presented with one.
The factors on which this decision should be made differ from person to person and therefore is a complex issue to tackle. The people who support taking this decision on the outwardly nature may be even right as in the case of information technology which is now quite a stable market therefore has lot of opportunities. I prefer that the decision of changing the career should be made on the basis of genuine interest in the career with unmatched passion and the happiness of the individual while pursuing this career path to get the best results from efforts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a career; careers
...t demands, job opportunities and choose a careers based on these points. However, I stron...
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...bove example very clearly indicates that if this decision was made based on outwa...
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Suggestion: ,
...ing my interest in the subject even more , on the other hand , if a person who had...
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Suggestion: ,
...he subject even more , on the other hand , if a person who had passion for marketi...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
... for marketing but is still working for an IT firm as a coder will not fulfill the du...
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Message: Did you mean 'firms'?
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...arketing but is still working for an IT firm as a coder will not fulfill the duties ...
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...therefore is a complex issue to tackle. The people who support taking this decision...
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...ng this decision on the outwardly nature may be even right as in the case of info...
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...est in the career with unmatched passion and the happiness of the individual whil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2484.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72243346008 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57083908184 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423954372624 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.9824868442 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.6 100.406767564 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0666666667 20.6045352989 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6 5.45110844103 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0401371831334 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0195205584947 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237348128802 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0296602060141 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0130750865575 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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