Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Some people advocate that children should be handed with smart phones for keeping in touch and also for being connected to the wide amount of information on the internet. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that young children should be kept aloof using smart phones. I support my viewpoint with three reasons and examples as stated below.
First of all, the young children have very dynamic and curious minds which are inclined towards learning new things and experiencing new things leading to development of imagination. Now a days, variety of research shows that the feeling of curiosity, aliveness of the children, the power of imagination have been suppressed because of the access to internet and smartphones these young children have. For example, My sister who is 8 years of age, has more screen time and less of creative or imaginative process such as drawing, painting, clay modelling the children of mostly play with which helps in increasing their imagination. If you ask my sister about a meaning of a word she will try to find on internet rather than in the dictionary where she can more words which may interest her and she might read about it. Therefore, If any young child does not have access to the internet, he or she will try to indulge into activities of sports making the child physically active, and imaginative in actions. The above example very clearly demonstrates how the thinking ability of these children is made like a tunnel and look for solutions or information at only one place.
Secondly, the young children have less of an interaction about some real topics with their friends or family. They fail to nurture social relations and social skills whose importance is unmatched considering that we live in a society. The internet can moreover influence these young minds and change their perspective of what is right or wrong since all the information on the internet is not authentic. Majority of young people showing signals of mental health degradation have reported access to internet at very young age. For example, any child who has never interacted with people a lot grows into an introvert leading to burden of society on such individuals because they have no real friends. A negative example of the same could be , the 90s kinds who did not enjoy the luxury of internet till their 20s had actually good social presence and skills to develop social contacts which is confirmed by latest research as well.
To conclude, the internet also acts as a boon to these young students in terms of supplying information and allows to learn , understand and be in contact with their parents any point of time but has more disadvantages because its access cannot be controlled nor timed at this present age and hence it is a very complex to deal with. In my viewpoint, the internet access should not be granted to young children because its curbs their imaginative growth along with suppressing the felling of curiosity. It further devoid the individual of communication and important social skills making the situation worse for such individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
... leading to development of imagination. Now a days, variety of research shows that the fee...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ding to development of imagination. Now a days, variety of research shows that the fee...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... A negative example of the same could be , the 90s kinds who did not enjoy the lux...
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Line 13, column 116, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...rms of supplying information and allows to learn , understand and be in contact with the...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...upplying information and allows to learn , understand and be in contact with their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, such as, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99423076923 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65579156062 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.4252063208 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.277777778 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8888888889 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250784671503 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080730881638 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407156414072 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160311337579 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238750807007 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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