Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
The job is of the most critical things in one’s life. Although the importance of getting more knowledge in university could not be neglected, having a job is more important for the experiences that one can be gained, the money can be saved and as the main reason, the social activities can be learned.
First of all, the unbelievable results of the study of many successful managers in the first 100 prosperous companies around the world, reveals that more than 40 percent of them haven’t had a high level of academical degree. Thus, the surprising results make people pay more attention to the importance of experiences in one’s success. Therefore, I absolutely recommend my friend to study in a university which can be graduated as soon as possible. Then, when he finds a job, he should try to get as much experience as he can which leads him to a promising future of success.
Secondly, earning and saving money could be a contributing factor in everyone’s decisions. Needless to say, everyone should work because no one is going to support them financially. Moreover, my friend has been alone since he was a child and he never gets any support from his parents and family. So, in my idea, it is better for him to get graduated as soon as possible and try to find a full-time job.
Finally, not any theoretical courses are able to thoroughly teach one how to interact with others. And this valuable asset would not be available but in real circumstances. From my perspective, not only my friend, but everyone should soon get into the world of learning new things about social activities which are not easy to learn them.
Briefly, In my idea, being graduated soon is essential because of experience, money and social skills. If one has these three things, he would have been successful in his life and would have had more carrier offers, nevertheless of what his educational degree is.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, finally, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85670731707 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85145415953 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548780487805 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5351013065 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.2 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8666666667 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121938345576 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444951460749 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257642928438 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715890207855 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144206791756 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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