Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
– A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
– A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize certain examples.
Career is very important in people's life. If they have a good profession, life would be much easier as they do not have to be dependent on others, therefore, these days everybody focuses on education to build up their career. There are many pros and cons of the options whether it’s about picking a major that would provide a degree sooner with a full-time job or taking a major which requires many years of study and offers a better work opportunity. I think I would prefer a major which can offer a better job despite the years it takes to complete the studies. I will explore my reasons in the following passages.
To begin with, opting for a course with great job can offer a secure life despite the years it takes to study. Time that people invest in their studies is never a waste since education can provide a stable and secure life which everybody wishes for. Choosing a major with a shorter duration if provide a job with a lesser job opportunity then it would create a problem in the future. Take my friend, for instance, she completed her major of seven years long and as soon as she finished, she got a lot of job opportunity and now she’s doing a great in her life. She is a well-settled woman and thus operates of her own company. This example illustrates the secure and stable life after completing the major with a better job opportunity. A survey by the researchers have revealed that sixty percent of students with five or six years of major have better lifestyles as compare to those who have done a shorter course like one or two years of programs.
In addition, in university, as students spent more time, they not just get exposure and knowledge but also get to interact better with their faculties and professors as compared to the students taking shorter courses. It can be very helpful in the future in the terms of networking and also for career options. My own experience as a student demonstrates a compelling example of this. I have done a major in dental studies, it took me five years to complete my education. During these years, I have not just learned many things but also made a lot of good friends even have good contact with my professors. Hence, this example demonstrates the more years scholars spent in their universities, not just in their knowledge but also offers to meet and mingle with their professors.
Having manifested the aforementioned points and example, I can sum up that major with longer duration have not just an advantage of better job offers but also a secure life as wells as more interactions with colleagues and professors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 496, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...ng and as soon as she finished, she got a lot of job opportunity and now she's doing a ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6862745098 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64073318259 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457516339869 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8052240188 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.210526316 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206260167786 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663086881062 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675909685719 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130443254044 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738621996313 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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