Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
– A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
– A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
In my opinion a major that requires many years of study would be a better choice because you have a better chance to become successful if you have more employment opportunities; besides, the degree isn’t the only issue that matters in education. I will illustrate my reasons in the next paragraphs.
First, choosing a major that leads you to more job opportunities would be less risky. Indeed, when you are going to choose a job, if numerous job opportunities are available you can evaluate them and choose the one that you like more than others. Conversely, if you have a few options, you have to choose one of them even if you don’t like them as much as you expected. For example, when my brother was going to choose a major, he decided to choose one that allows him to finish his studies sooner because he wanted to find a full-time job and marry as soon as possible. Although he finished his study very soon and found a full-time job after that, he has always complained about his job because it isn’t his favorite job. Indeed, he had just one job opportunity after graduation and he had to peak it. Maybe, if he chose another major that required long years of study he could choose a better job among the available opportunities.
Second, although getting a degree is very important, there are other issues that are important as much as getting the degree; thus, finishing study sooner doesn’t help you to fulfill them. Undoubtedly, the university is a place that you can learn new things in a fun atmosphere without any concern about the costs. As a result, if you finish your studies soon, you may lose your chance to learn more things by using the facilities of the university. For instance, when I was a student at university, although I could finish my studies sooner, I decided to pace down and stay more in university because I was invited to work on an experimental project in which the costs were borne by the university. Thus, it was a great chance to learn a lot of new things without any cost. Consequently, at the end of the project, I succeeded to submit two scientific papers for a well-known journal. Furthermore, these papers and the experience of working in such a project, help me to get an admission for a Ph.D. position in one of the top universities of Canada.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that choosing a major that last longer to finish, would be a better idea.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, conversely, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66898148148 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.779466115 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474537037037 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.2991236783 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.647058824 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4117647059 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31588394062 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10103568799 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678602279849 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177623255968 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344545599686 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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