Your school has enough money to purchase either computers for students or books for the library. Which should your school choose to buy, computers or books? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether computers are beneficial for students or not. While some people believe that books and libraries are more advantageous for students, I hold the opposite view. I think using the technology in the education system today is more beneficial for most students than using books.
To begin with, when scholars have computers in their classes, they will have easy access to many online recourses such as Pubmed and Drug.Com. These convenient websites allow students to find all information they need about any subjects. For example, when I was at university, I had one class about the breast cancer, so the professor asked us to go to the library and looked for any new medications that might be a perfect choice with pregnant woman in case of breast cancer. At that time, I opened my phone and I went to Pubmed website. Then, I wrote the question on the browser and I found many studies about the tamoxifen medication as the best choice for any pregnant women with breast cancer. As a result, I found the answer in a very short time and I gave it to the professor. On the other hand, searching about any information form books is a really obsolete practice for most students because it is difficult to find the exact information from one source. Sometimes scholars have to look in more than five books and spend more than six days to find only one answer.
Adding to the previous point, when students have computers in their classes, they will improve their computer skills such as typing speed and working on some software programs. These skills allow them to be a perfect fit for most job opportunities in the future. For instance, most big companies around the world today requires their future employees to have excellent computers skills. Anyone who does not have these essential skills, he/she will not have the position. Obviously, learning computers skills is very beneficial for most students to have job in the future.
In conclusion, I encourage schools to invest money to improve the education system through purchasing computers and other electronic devices.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90858725762 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57429413196 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529085872576 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1597178591 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.235294118 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19348188218 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653174622826 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471082520407 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134743648711 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358333968019 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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