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Agree or disagree, the best way for parents to make the children learn about responsibility is to have children care for an animal?

Nowadays, people tend to have different points of view on the question that how to foster children’s responsibility. The most often heard contention about this topic is that parents should have children care for an animal. However, I find this view overly generalized. In fact, this issue can be analyzed from two perspectives.

Indisputably, there is no justification for us to ignore the fact that caring an animal will help children learn about responsibility, especially when it comes to preschool kids. It is widely accepted that preschool kids have nothing to worry about, all they have to do is explore the world. Thus, for them, they have full time to take care of a pet which is the best way to foster their responsibility. I can think of no better illustration than the example of my sister Lucy, who is 6 years old. Last year, her parents brought her a very cute dog. Lucy had to learn how to feed it, playing with it, and going for a walk with it. Lucy used to be a kid who would not do anything by herself, however, when she had the dog, she learned how to took care of it. As a result, she now can take care of the dog all by herself, what’s more, she learns a lot of things. Had Lucy not took care of the dog, she would not have learned how to be responsible. Therefore, recalling the experience of Lucy, taking care of an animal is the best way to foster preschool children’s responsibility.

However compelling the argument above is, it cannot support us arrive at the verdict because it only focus on the young children. In order to make a dependable conclusion, we must consider other situations in which it is useless for middle school children. It is universally believed that the middle school kids are very busy with their study. In this case, even if they have to take care of an animal, it will end up be their parents’ duty, because they are busy with the study, and parents should ask them to do some house chores which is the better way to cultivate their responsibility. My experience is the best example to prove my point of view. When I was 12, I was routinely sprinted through jam-packed schedules, attending classed, doing homework, preparing for exams, so I did not have time to look after an animal. However, my parents asked me to clean my room and wash the dishes everyday no matter how busy I was. In this way, I realized that it was my duty to keep my room clean and contribute to the family. It is doing house chores that enables me to be responsible instead of raising a pet. Thus, I am convinced that for middle school kids the best way to make the them learn about responsibility is to doing house chores.

To sum up, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw a conclusion that it is irrational to take it for granted that the best way for parents to make the children learn about responsibility is to have children care for an animal. Therefore, only in case-by-case way can we fully explore this issue’s complexity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 319, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...re the world. Thus, for them, they have full time to take care of a pet which is the best...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'focuses', 'focusses'?
Suggestion: focuses; focusses
...s arrive at the verdict because it only focus on the young children. In order to make...
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Line 5, column 893, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...me to clean my room and wash the dishes everyday no matter how busy I was. In this way, ...
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Line 5, column 1179, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'them'?
Suggestion: the; them
...middle school kids the best way to make the them learn about responsibility is to doing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, in fact, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 10.4613686534 268% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 22.412803532 326% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 30.3222958057 237% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2455.0 1373.03311258 179% => OK
No of words: 540.0 270.72406181 199% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5462962963 5.08290768461 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.04702891845 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71510722997 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 145.348785872 171% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459259259259 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 419.366225166 185% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 3.25607064018 645% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 13.0662251656 199% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4398953724 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4230769231 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 7.06452816374 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 4.33554083885 392% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441554386095 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117176530781 0.0996497079465 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130267411432 0.0662205650399 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30865359294 0.162205337803 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855148952542 0.0443174109184 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.2367328918 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.42419426049 85% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, in fact, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments