Each year millions of birds get injured by trying to fly through windows Here three solutions have been proposed to stop this in the passage But whether these solutions are sufficiently effective or not is investigated in the lecture In fact all solution | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Each year, millions of birds get injured by trying to fly through windows. Here, three solutions have been proposed to stop this in the passage. But whether these solutions are sufficiently effective or not is investigated in the lecture. In fact all solution are considered ineffective by the lecturer.

The reading and the lecture are both about solutions for preventing birs from injuries that caused by hitting to the glasses of the buildings.The author of the reading feels there is three possible explanations for guide birds away from buildings;however, the professor finds the idea dubious and casts doubt on the reasons proposed by the writer of the text.
To begin with, the author mentions that the architects can use unidirection windows that birds cannot see through the window and consider it a solid barrier. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He brings up the idea that this glasses can reflect the lights of the sun, it operates like a mirror and so it reflects the image of the sky, therefore the birds will hit to the glasses. Additionally, he claims that this change to the glasses may increase the probability of injuries to the birds.
secondly, the writer of the passage holds the view that responsible businesses can use colorful designs on the glasses. in contrast, the speaker rebuts this hypothesis by underlying the fact that although using the colorful designs on the window, there is some opening holes in the window that birds see them and try to fly through them and be hit by the glass. He elaborates this by bringing up the point that this solution can work just in one circumstance that the colorful designs put together in the condition that it make extremely small holes and so it will be very dark that birds cannot see the light.
Finally, the author posits that creating an artificial magnetic field near the window may be beneficial for prevent the injuries of the birds. Moreover, in the article, it is stated that artificial magnetic field will disturb the natural navigating system of birds and steer the birds direction away of the window. On the contrary, the professor dismisses this issue due to the fact that birds use magnetic field of the earth when they want to travel long distances to recognize which way they should fly. Furthermore, he notices that for traveling short trips the birds just use their eyes and the brightness of the light; because of these this is not an effective way to prevent of birds injuries that happened due to hit to the glasses.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...hitting to the glasses of the buildings.The author of the reading feels there is th...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
... probability of injuries to the birds. secondly, the writer of the passage holds the vi...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...an use colorful designs on the glasses. in contrast, the speaker rebuts this hypot...
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Line 4, column 279, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...avigating system of birds and steer the birds direction away of the window. On the co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 383.0 270.72406181 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81984334204 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59720656436 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475195822454 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 419.366225166 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.3407474565 49.2860985944 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.833333333 110.228320801 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9166666667 21.698381199 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9166666667 7.06452816374 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188992149295 0.272083759551 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656612866465 0.0996497079465 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369504622282 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109737481075 0.162205337803 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258273091991 0.0443174109184 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.3589403974 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 53.8541721854 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments