Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of doubt supporting both arts and sports plays a prominent role in every country. Some people are proponents of the claim that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics; however, others hold another perspective and believe that governments should spend more financial resources in support of athletics than in support of arts. The idea to which i subscribe is the former one.my view point is based on quite a few reasons, two compelling ones of which have been elaborated upon hereunder.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that the more money is spent in arts the more qualified will be the art works; while the quality of art works rise they better display the culture of their country and so culture of their country will be better-known among other countries; As the culture of a country is representative of the values of nation by showing values of the nation, the country will be more respectful. Turkey is a good example of this matter. About 100 years ago, Turkey started to spend more money in arts and this decision help the economy of their country to develop as fast as possible.
The second noteworthy reason is that when a country spends more money in arts, using of art works will be more accessible for people of a country. A psychological study shows that the more an individual is involved with art the more he/she is calm and can make smarter decision in the emergency condition moreover even having a drawing in your restroom can help you with making more reasonable decision. With considering all of the results of these studies, when a country spends more money in art it has a lot of benefits for mental health of peoples of the country
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that spending more money by governments in arts than spending in athletics is a good and reasonable decision and it not only helps the development of economy of a country but also helps improvement in the mental health of dwellers of a country. Consequently, I highly suggest that governments spend more money in art in comparison with athletics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7486631016 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69192783144 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475935828877 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 136.609699509 48.9658058833 279% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.6 100.406767564 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.4 20.6045352989 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322702605627 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137369259658 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110672867114 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208753343433 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847056321508 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 58.1214874552 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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