Extra 2- Integrated writing

Essay topics: Extra 2- Integrated writing

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The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about smarts cars which have been controled by computer. In the text, the author provides three main benefits of using smart cars in stead of conventional cars. The lecturer challenges all the viable advantages mentioned in the reading and believes that none of the arguments is possible.

Firstly, the author states that utilizing smart cars will prevent many accidents since these cars' sensors are very accurate. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that technological devices have some drawbacks, and they fail to work well occasionally. In this case, accidents by smart cars will be more worsen than accidents by conventional cars. Thus, the number of accidents and injuries in accidents will not reduce.

Moreover, the author asserts that implementing smart cars will reduce traffic congestion. The speaker, on the contrary, points out that nowadays, a copious amount of people desire to buy their own personal car. In this regard, the number of cars will be increased in streets and highways. Hence, smart cars high speed cannot effective and practical in such a condition.

Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that people are able to save a tremendous amount of money, which they spend on repairs and replacement, by using smart cars. The lecturer, in contrast, posits that companies require to add some advance sensors to smart cars in order to drive in direct routes. In this vein, the mentioned sensors price are very expensive than costs for repairs and replacement. Thus, individuals not only will not save money but also will spend more money on equipment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: IN_STEAD_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
...three main benefits of using smart cars in stead of conventional cars. The lecturer challen...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: adding
...contrast, posits that companies require to add some advance sensors to smart cars in o...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, firstly, hence, moreover, so, thus, well, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12267657993 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62378223554 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539033457249 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2658206294 49.2860985944 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.8666666667 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9333333333 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06452816374 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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