If your friends want to change their lifestyle to achieve a positive lifestyle, which of the following suggestions would you recommend? 1. Be more disciplined and have a stronger will; 2. Work with people who share the same goals; 3. Consult a professional expert (a doctor, a nutritionist, or psychologist)
Some people believe that one’s strong will is sufficient enough to change one’s attitude toward life. The others cite the importance of consulting experts to get valuable help. However, in my opinion, I claim that working together with other people in a similar status can be the most effective and beneficial way of changing oneself. I will support my viewpoint with the following two reasons.
First of all, one can be continuously motivated with help of many others. Indeed, trying alone to tackle difficulties can be hard because even if one sets a strong will, it can be curbed in many circumstances. Furthermore, restoring the will alone is as hard as setting the will in the first place. However, if other people are surrounding one and they have the same objective, then they can encourage one another more easily. For example, there are many different sorts of addiction rehabilitation centers or clubs. Those who are addicted to some substances, whether it is alcohol or drugs, form a group together to eradicate addiction and change towards a healthy life. Sharing one’s thoughts and provoking each other makes a synergy and this is proven to be effective and successful in many cases.
Second of all, one can implement penalties as well as compliments in working in groups. When one works solely or only receives one-way guides from experts, it is hard for them to be corrected or punished when they misbehave and digress from achieving the goal. However, one can be controlled by regulations set by other people when working together. For example, I participated in many group studies where we studied for the same exam. On these occasions, we set specific goals and if one could not make it, he or she had to be penalized by paying a little amount of money or being excluded from the group. Not to be criticized for not putting required effort, each person had to work harder. Thus, working with others who share the same goals can benefit one by enforcing them to follow their responsibility.
To conclude, choosing guides and methods on how to change one’s life and achieve their goal can be varied from person to person. Some might think solo’s strong will is most required, while others think advice from the experts is the best. Nevertheless, I still contend that cooperating together with those who want to accomplish the same goals can be the most effective and powerful way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 451, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, as well as, first of all, in many cases, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 5.04856512141 357% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 30.3222958057 168% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1373.03311258 146% => OK
No of words: 408.0 270.72406181 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9068627451 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6721397123 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 145.348785872 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522058823529 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 419.366225166 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1010272429 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47619047619 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205285636432 0.272083759551 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706320147255 0.0996497079465 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047152966703 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143507398399 0.162205337803 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176407205775 0.0443174109184 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 63.6247240618 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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