Integrated Writing: Conflict approach and fulfillment approach

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Integrated Writing: Conflict approach and fulfillment approach

The reading passage and the lecture are both about the human personality. The reading passage describes about the conflict approach which is based on idea that every person is in state of conflict. The lecturer refutes to the idea presented in the reading and describes human life by fulfillment approach.

Firstly, the reading passage believes that in conflict approach human are always in the state of conflict in everyday life. The lecturer posits to this idea. He argues that life is not only about the conflict between the battling forces rather, in fulfillment approach, life is a force towards fulfillment and bringing satisfaction in humans life.

Secondly, the reading passage argues that life is never ending series of conflict from the birth to death. It states that personality develops by managing the conflicts. However, the lecturer casts doubt about this. The lecturer argues that personality is shaped by the image of a person. Moreover, the personality is shaped by fulfillment of desire and by the success and failure that comes along with it.

Finally, the reading passage suggests that everyone deals conflict in various ways and the difference to manage conflict makes the personality differ. The lecturer is against this view-point and argues life is fulfilling the personal goals and personality is shaped by the way how each person manage to attain that goals in life.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t every person is in state of conflict. The lecturer refutes to the idea presented ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1179.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 226.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21681415929 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6185009273 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 145.348785872 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455752212389 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 367.2 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3597969067 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6923076923 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3846153846 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220571520354 0.272083759551 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895259631939 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992135251586 0.0662205650399 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158282663554 0.162205337803 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967763258886 0.0443174109184 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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