Integrated Writing: Conflict approach and fulfillment approach

The reading and the lecture are both about personality aproaches. The author mentions that a person's personality is formed by the state of conflict. But the lecturer affirms that there are more kinds of aproaches, and one of them is the fulfillment aproach. Here are some important points they make.

First, the reading conveys the idea that a person, since he or she wakes up, has internal conflicts all day long. On the other hand, the professor states that it is not allways like that. He poitns out that in the fulfillment aproach a person has only one force that moves him or her, and this force is called the need of fulfillment instead of many conflicts to resolve.

Secondly, the author stablished in the passage that internal forces are in conflict with external forces. Furthermore, this conflicts shows how a person reacts in certain situations and that is the way how personality is formed. But the lecturer states another point of view. He mentions that personality is formed in a person by how he or she achieves his or her goals.

Finally, the conflict aproaches conveys the idea that humans have a never-ending series of conflict with themselfs and with the world that surounds them. But the fulfillment aproach states that human personality is formed by how their actual lives matches with their dreamed live, and how much effort does it took.

In conclusion, the author has his own thinking about how personality is formed and the lecturer states another theory in the same topic.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...y aproaches. The author mentions that a persons personality is formed by the state of c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90234375 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58332512967 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5078125 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0386204367 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6428571429 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0988126429968 0.272083759551 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373407949925 0.0996497079465 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374510977009 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0597720292408 0.162205337803 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361780934418 0.0443174109184 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.3589403974 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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