Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible.

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Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible.

The reading and the lecture are both about the possibility of human to live permanently on other planets than the earth, specifically on Venus. While the author of the reading states that the conditions there are not supportive of permanent residence, the lecturer challenges every argument made by the reading.

To begin with, the author argues that the pressure at Venus' surface is much higher than the pressure on the earth. The article mentions that damage would take place for any people who will land on Venus. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He suggests that establishing a floating station would resolve the problem. In fact, he agrees with the author that the pressure on Venus is impossible for humans to tolerate, but he says that a station 50 kilometers above the surface would overcome this dilemma. In fact, he states that the pressure in this height is equal to the pressure on the earth.

Secondly, the writer states that there are not water resources available on Venus' surface. The lecture, however, rebuts this by mentioning that a chemical process between the various elements of Venus' atmosphere, such as nitrogen and carbon, would produce a sufficient amount of water there. Therefore, no need for importing water from the earth.

Finally, the author posits that a very little amount of sunlight would be able to reach Venus' surface. This is because of the the thick clouds that present in Venus' atmosphere. In contrast, the lecturer's position is that not all of the clouds are thick and prevent sunlight to be utilized, he says that clouds above 50 kilometers are thin, thus sunlight could be used. Moreover, he thinks that, also, the reflected sunlight could be used to generate enough electricity for people's needs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 123, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...reach Venus surface. This is because of the the thick clouds that present in Venus atmo...
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Line 13, column 123, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...reach Venus surface. This is because of the the thick clouds that present in Venus atmo...
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Line 13, column 226, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ast, the lecturers position is that not all of the clouds are thick and prevent sunlight t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, in fact, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 294.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54479967151 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513605442177 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1202198203 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9333333333 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169290918128 0.272083759551 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561605935638 0.0996497079465 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456697112474 0.0662205650399 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992113320942 0.162205337803 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303304521018 0.0443174109184 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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