Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave

Essay topics:

Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Undoubtedly, since invetion of television our life has been changed alot, and although some critics and debutes are existed abut television's effect, it has plenty of positive impacts on our life. In my opinion, movies and TV have positive effect on young people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will eplore in the following essay.

To begin with, television can be used as a educational tool, which help students to improve their abilities as well as getting high marks in their courses. This is obvious that over watching of TV have some negative effect, but TV is not a personal thing in home, which whole family members use this device. Thus, parents are able to control their cildren watching time, and make a schedul for them. As a result young people can spent a littile time on TV, and use it for important things. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, I liked to watch a lot of shows and sport matches, but my parent told me that I can spend only two hour per day. As a result, I decided to use my time for science programs, and this helped me to get high scores in Science and biology courses. Other learning program can help young people to behave in the best way.

Furthermure, movies and TV, at least in my country, have some rules and strong restrictions, which make national TV family friendly. There is no doubt that appropriate usage of every technological devices are necessary, but even over watch of TV programs in my country don't have negative effect. In addition, a lot of shows and movies are entertaining, and it is perfect for young people. Moreover, because of school's work and part time jobs, young people have a lot of stress and problem, so it would not have possible for them to get relax if there were no good shows and moives on the TV. Thus, this can even help young people to beave very well in community.

In conclusion, I strongly belive that movies and television have positive impacts on young people behavior. This is because, Tv can be used as a tool for learning. And because TV programs in the a lot of societies have restriction to produce good quality programs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, thus, well, at least, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 7.30242825607 274% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 388.0 270.72406181 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57989690722 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51810718609 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507731958763 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.51434878587 594% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.582955142 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5263157895 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279853360825 0.272083759551 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955704165759 0.0996497079465 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993355399812 0.0662205650399 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200486490888 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590585027273 0.0443174109184 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.2367328918 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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