One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die.

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One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die.

The reading passage and lecture have conflicting opinions about whether it is a good idea to use ted method which helps extinct turtles to escape from shrimp nets.

The article strongly postulates that this method has a lot of drawbacks, so it is not an effective way to help them. On the other hand, the listening adamantly delineates that none of the author's criticisms is convincing.

To begin with, according to the professor in the lecture, even though there is a little chance to trap in these nets, it does not mean that ted is useless. To be more specific, if the 5000 boats throw their nests in the underwater, there is a high chance for 5000 turtles to trap in these nets within one month. Therefore, for the few turtles population, this is a huge danger of extinction. Nonetheless, the article offsets these points by declaring that trapped turtles are found in only certain situations and their chances are very low. Furthermore, every time a small number of shrimps will escape through these passages, so it will really costly for every fisher whose lives depend on this business.

On top of this, the lecturer further asserts that time-limiting method can work only in theory because it is almost impossible to enforce them. Moreover, it will be hard for the government to check every fishers' nets, thus ted is more manageable to implement them. These claims refute the writer's implications about there is also another way to save these turtles:time-limiting. If the fishers check every time their nets whether or not the turtles trap due to shortened time, it will allow some trapped turtles to be saved or breathe.

Lastly, the speaker in the lecture suggests that ted is easier to modify its design, so there is no harm for some large species to trap in the shrimp nets. Nevertheless, the author counters these indications by insisting that this device will not work for some big animals such as leatherback and loggerhead because its standard will not give them a chance to escape from it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'turtles'' or 'turtle's'?
Suggestion: turtles'; turtle's
...ithin one month. Therefore, for the few turtles population, this is a huge danger of ex...
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Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...s are very low. Furthermore, every time a small number of shrimps will escape through these passa...
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Line 7, column 423, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...the fishers check every time their nets whether or not the turtles trap due to shortened time,...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, thus, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85217391304 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6969515335 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 145.348785872 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539130434783 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7410994293 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.571428571 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 7.06452816374 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108881699822 0.272083759551 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405604339649 0.0996497079465 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419037119222 0.0662205650399 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0624756555995 0.162205337803 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396150003014 0.0443174109184 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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