One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest that this problem can be solved through an invention called a turtle excluder device (TED) that is incorporated into the nets. A TED provides a passage through which the turtles can escape. However, TEDs have been criticized for several reasons. First, some shrimpers (shrimp fishers) argue that turtles get trapped only rarely: it is estimated that on average, one shrimp boat accidentally catches about one turtle every month. On the other hand, using TEDs costs the shrimpers some of their catch. Every time the shrimpers cast the nets, a certain percentage of shrimp manage to escape through the turtle passages. The shrimpers complain that the cost of losing shrimp on a daily basis is too high in comparison with the small chance of saving one turtle. Second, there are alternative methods of protecting sea turtles that may be more effective than TEDs. One method that can be used is shortening the time limit that shrimp boats are allowed to keep their nets underwater. When the time limit is reached, the nets have to be pulled up to the surface, allowing any turtles caught in the net to get air and also giving shrimpers the opportunity to release the turtles from the nets. Third, TEDs are not effective for larger species of endangered sea turtles. Some species like loggerhead and leatherback turtles can grow to be quite large and cannot fit through the escape passage that standard TEDs provide. Such turtles cannot escape from the nets even if the nets are equipped with TEDs
In the passage, the author provides three criticisms regarding to TED, which is a device for rescuing trapped turtles in shrimp-fishing boats' nets. On the other hand, the professor refutes each of them and claims that TED must be configured on any shrimp-fishing boats.
Initially, the reading says that the turtles hardly ever get in the shrimpers' nets, and if boats occupy TED, shrimpers would lose tremendous benefits due to the fact that shrimps is going to escape from TED holes. On the contrary, the professor says even though trapping turtles in each shrimp boat nets happens rarely, on the whole there are thousands of these boats on the United states coasts, which brings about a huge reduction of the turtles' population. The professor suggests that instead of thinking about shrimpers' loss, think about endangered turtles' population.
In addition, the reading suggests that using alternative methods would be effective. For instance, the author recommends the government to establish a time limit law, which is confine shrimpers from keeping their nets beyond the legal time limit underwater. In contrast, the professor states that monitoring all boats is not a practical solution for the government. Indeed, the government can check the existence of TED devices for each single boat before leaving the coasts.
Last but not the least, the reading mentions that TED is not appropriate for bigger turtles’ species, which cannot escape from TED provided passages. Nevertheless, the professor argues that once the TED was installed, it can be modified without any function differences. She claims that the future advanced TED devices would solve this problem.
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Essay evaluation report
shrimps is going to escape
shrimps are going to escape
which is confine shrimpers from keeping their nets
which confines shrimpers from keeping their nets
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 265 250
No. of Characters: 1367 1200
No. of Different Words: 145 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.158 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.77 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'happens'.
Suggestion: rarely happens
...apping turtles in each shrimp boat nets happens rarely, on the whole there are thousands of th...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'turtles'' or 'turtle's'?
Suggestion: turtles'; turtle's
...ch brings about a huge reduction of the turtles population. The professor suggests that...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'turtles'' or 'turtle's'?
Suggestion: turtles'; turtle's
... shrimpers loss, think about endangered turtles population. In addition, the reading...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, for instance, in addition, in contrast, on the contrary, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 265.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35094339623 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7371994065 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558490566038 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9888734533 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.166666667 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136418245911 0.272083759551 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524268193048 0.0996497079465 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442893836363 0.0662205650399 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876769962444 0.162205337803 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525657182479 0.0443174109184 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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