Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Although encouraging children to study and getting the high grade is a useful way to make them try harder in school, offering money to the children for all of the high grades would not be a good idea. There are three main reasons to support my idea.
First and foremost, offering money for all high mark made children studying conditional. In other words, they will be encouraged to study only to earn more money, so, they fail to consider a more valuable aim for themselves. For example, most of the children in their childhood consider an imaginary career for themselves such as astronomy, engineering, or teaching; by giving them money after each high mark, their goals will turn to the receiving money and their horizon will be smaller.
Another prominent reason is that; by offering money after each success, they get used to it and receiving money will change to an expectation. In this way, if one day, it would not be possible for parents to give them money, they will be sad and it may affect their behaviors or even their attitudes toward studying. For instance, it could be possible that the economic condition of family change and parents do not be able to pay money to all their children for all good marks.
Last but not least, after a while, by repeating giving money to the children, this will change to a cliché for them and would not be as effective as before. However, in order to encourage children in all aspects of their lives, not only studying but also all effort and success, it is better to sometimes give them different stuff which they may need. By this work, on one hand, they do not get used to receiving something after each good grade, on the other hand, they will be surprised by receiving a small gift like a storybook or a beautiful pencil.
To sum up, according to all the aforementioned reasons, giving money per each excellent grade, made children conditional, they get used to it as an expectation and it will be changed to a usual thing after a while.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, such as, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 355.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65352112676 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51362326617 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467605633803 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 2.5761589404 466% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3430588843 49.2860985944 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5833333333 21.698381199 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06452816374 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37874443709 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159060224893 0.0996497079465 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807267133076 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238137145353 0.162205337803 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069681159626 0.0443174109184 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 11.0289183223 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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