TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

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TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

TPO30
Job is one of the most controversial issue, especially between youngsters, Since, there are several significant factors should be considered. When it comes to the working time, I personally, assume that having a job where I work only three days a week for long hours is more interesting than working for five days in shorter hours.

First and foremost, working only three days in a week will provide this opportunity for me to set the time to do other affairs which I like to do, in the other days. For example, I really would like to practice yoga as a permanent activity in my life, since, it affects my life in several different aspects. If I have free time for two days a week, I will be able to register for it in proper time and with a coach who is the best in my city. Although, it could be possible for me to go to the gym after work, it would not be so enjoyable for me, because, I do not have enough energy to do all exercises. On the other hand, doing physical exercises in the morning would be more useful for body health.

Another prominent reason is that, if I have free time in two days of a week, I will arrange another job to do in order to have more income. As I have some useful experiences in tutoring, I can use my time to have student in my home to teach math. It would not be possible for me to tutoring after my another job because I try to be active and happy in my class but after daily working I cannot. If I would not be energetic, students do not learn as much as they do in other days and this is a matter of great importance to me to be satisfied with my teaching.

Last but not least, my husband and I crazy about trip, we use any short time to arrange a trip. So, working in only three days, allows me to planning a five-days trip with two days of weekend. I believe that, we have use our time to visit all parts of my beautiful country, since, it has lots of picturesque city, village, dessert, and mountain in all provinces, but, we could have visited only about half of them. Therefore, this would be a valuable opportunity to continue this path.

In conclusion, working in only three days a week provides me this opportunity to use my time in many worthy affairs. Spending time for adventurous trips, Taking the time to do other activities I like, such as sport, and arranging another job in other two days.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 282, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...n my life, since, it affects my life in several different aspects. If I have free time for two da...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in short, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.29530201342 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48031956526 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460850111857 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.9035027079 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.941176471 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2941176471 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328041301056 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127488800264 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1182548217 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228469962329 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105306314063 0.0645574589148 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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