TPO 45. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Nowadays, regarding the advent of technology and the prevalence using of inventions like the internet, peoples in general and youngsters especially have been more independent than they were in the past. As a result, they are able to make decisions better than they did in the past. There are two main reasons to support my idea.
First and foremost, the advent of the internet and therefore social networks, lead to an expanded connection between people all around the world. In fact, the internet makes it too easy for people to connect to other people who live in other parts of the world and as a result transferring information would be simple. For example, it takes only a few seconds that a young woman in my country read a scientific news which is the result of a scientist's research in the us. this fact, therefore makes her more aware than a young woman in 40 years ago who was forced to stay at home and had no relationship except with her family and neighbors. this significant issue, undoubtedly, is affected her independence to make a decision without my parents' help, since I find myself more knowledgeable than them.
Another prominent reason is that; the increasing level of education in the society enables youngsters to get involved in their society during social activities and their careers more than the past, so it would be possible for them not to be depended on their parents. For example, a young woman who has a master degree and works as an expert in a laboratory or clinic, has a myriad of relationship every day with different clients and colleagues, therefore, huge amounts of experience that enable her to make right decisions without the help of her parents. Even she may help parents if they need any consultant in making a crucially important decision.
To sum up, according to the aforementioned reasons, youngsters make decisions independently rather than they did in the past because they often have a higher level of education and more social activities, and using internet enables them to have more awareness then people in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, as for, for example, in fact, in general, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93785310734 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77079335141 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54802259887 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.3342551566 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.666666667 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269260094091 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09453697636 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050857096594 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161424445736 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337311370638 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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