Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether physical exercise is beneficial for students or not. While some people prefer students to concentrate on their academic classes and ignore exercise classes, I hold the opposite view. I believe that physical exercise should be mandatory for all students because it has a tremendous role in their body.
To begin with, when schools have exercise classes, scholar will be encouraged to be in healthy lifestyle. Today, the percent of obesity has increased because lack of exercise. People become more vulnerable to have several chronic diseases related to the obesity such as heart failure, diabetes, and hyperlipidemia. For example, in my hometown Saudi Arabia, students have only one exercise class during the week. Therefore, most students are heavy weight because they spend most of the day sitting on the chair without any physical movement. These students are likely to have many health problems when they become old because of their obesity. On the other hand, students in Japan spend most of their school time doing some yoga and aerobic training. Thus, most of them is in perfect healthy shape.
Adding to the previous point, when scholars have some exercise classes, they will decrease their level of stress. Most physical exercises release all people’s negative thoughts and adjust their mood. For instance, when students do meditation which is a kind of yoga exercise, they will emit all their bad thoughts out of their bodies and they will have more positive attitude.
On top of that, when scholars practice some physical exercises at school, they will broaden their ability to receive knowledge. Most exercises enhance the brain ability to accept information and they allow the brain to memorize better. For example, when I was at school, I was practicing in the gym. Therefore, I realized that my study performance was become better comparing when I was not doing any kind of exercises.
In conclusion, I encourage school to make physical exercise courses mandatory for all students. This is because they will be in a healthy shape, decrease their level of stress, and they will enhance their brain to work better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'heavyweight'?
Suggestion: heavyweight
... the week. Therefore, most students are heavy weight because they spend most of the day sitt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 358.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14804469274 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56198857577 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505586592179 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 3.25607064018 307% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7911406747 49.2860985944 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.15 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199691969407 0.272083759551 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696042487115 0.0996497079465 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535265044281 0.0662205650399 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120979829218 0.162205337803 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544020979789 0.0443174109184 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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