A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go on vacation or to buy a car. Your friend asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choice and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on the way that people should spend their money. While some of them prefer to spend the money that they have to travel and enjoy exploring the world, I hold the opposite view. Personally, If I had a friend who has some money, I would like to advise him to buy a car with that money.
To begin with, buying a new automobile can help my friend to get durable services that might last for several years. He/she will be able to travel by using this car many times to anywhere without being worried about booking an expensive flight either by bus or airplane. For example, my brother Ahmed lives in Ohio, since he came to the United State, he did not travel to any places because the flight tickets were too expensive from him. He also has four kids, so he needs to spend at least $3000 to travel to LA. At that time, he preferred to save his money and avoid traveling to any places. Last year, he got $10000 from the government because of his excellent grade at Ohio University. He directly bought a car with this money; therefore, he decided to take a road trip in the United states by using this car. At first, he went to New York and visited the Time Square over there. Then, he drove south to visit Miami and spend time on the beautiful beach. Then he went west to visit the Universal Studio at Los Angeles. Indeed, he explored the whole states using his vehicle without taking the risk of booking an expensive flight. Now, his car helps him to travel every year in the summer and winter. Furthermore, he told me that he will take his car with him to Saudi Arabia when he finishes school. This car will sustain for at least another seven years.
Adding to the previous point, people can get money when they buy new car. They can work with their car in some Taxi companies such as Uber, Lyft, or Kareem. For instance, my cousin Ahmed has a small car. After he graduated from high school, he did not find any job. Thus, He decided to work through using his car as an Uber driver. He was able to make $4000 per month. Indeed, this car helped him to earn a lot of money.
In conclusion, I encourage anyone who has some money to buy an automobile. This is because vehicles have several benefits to their owner.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33569739953 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13246371206 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7638522175 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5384615385 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2692307692 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105353698442 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362503334596 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394234784413 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081531871464 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323209748732 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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