Should a city try to preserve its old, historical buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether city should keep the historical buildings or not. While some people believe that historical buildings should be destroyed and replaced by big towers, I hold the opposite view. I think governments should preserve their historical sites.
To begin with, when cities keep their historical buildings and do not destroy them, they can preserve their identity. Historical buildings represent people’s culture. Most people tend to connect structural sculpture and historical places to the culture who lived in that place. For example, the pyramids in Egypt can tell people about the huge royal family that lived at that time. These people were very tall and strong to build that big structure. Therefore, without observing pyramids in Egypt, People would not know much about the ancient who lived in Egypt long time ago. Furthermore, archeologists were able to find the style of cooking for ancient Egyptian people by examining some tools inside the pyramid. As a result, people until now know the identity and all the traditional attitude for ancient Egyptian. They would not know that if these historical sites were destroyed.
Adding to the previous point, preserving historical buildings enable governments to improve their economic status. They can earn a lot of money from tourists who come and visit these historical places. For instance, the government in Paris improved their income in 2002 to double by allowing tourists to pay a fee when they were visiting Evil Tower. Another example is that the United Sates government made a lot of money in 2005 from tourists who came and visit the State of Librety in New York city. Obviously, most governments can increase their income by preserving their historical sites and open them to tourists.
In conclusion, I encouraged governments to keep all historical sites in the same place and invest more money to keep them.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17834394904 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63891891852 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547770700637 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4839135888 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4444444444 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209718320601 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777465433415 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769522533098 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140920882665 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707070257968 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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