If you could invent something new, what product would you develop? Use specific details to explain why this invention is needed
Many people think it is a good idea for everyone to create new things that would have a great impact on the future. While some people feel afraid to invent and make new developments in their societies, I think whenever I have the chance to invent something new, I would develop new medication for cancer since I am a pharmacist and I know better in drug synthesis process.
To begin with, developing a new medicine that cure cancer enables cancer patients to get cured and live longer life. These patients are struggling in their life by taking extensive dose of chemotherapy which has tremendous side effects. These side effects decrease the life span for most cancer patients and sometimes kill them in very short time. Therefore, creating a new advance medicine can solve this issue and help cancer patients to live longer. For example, my aunt had a breast cancer ten years ago. At her first day with her chemotherapy, she had severe vomiting and she was tired the whole day. Two months later, she began to lose her hair and sometimes vomit some blood. After sex month from her chemotherapy, she died suffering from these extreme side effects that are associated with chemotherapy. Apparently, developing new medicine that cure cancer without any intensive side effects would be a perfect invention that help cancer patients to be healthy and live longer.
Adding to the previous point, creating a new medicine that cure cancer can make me earn a lot of money. Recently, most drug companies tend to invest more money on research that related to cancer treatment. They do that in order to have the chance to develop new drug that has tremendous demand, so they can get more profits when they sell this new medication. For instance, Novartis which is one of the famous drug companies invested more than million dollars in cancer research treatments. Last year, this company announced that they have developed a new medicine for the cancer. Then, they put it in the market, and they earn billions of dollars. However, this medication withdrew from the market because of adulteration. Therefore, creating new medicine for cancer without adulteration would allow me to make a huge wealth as Novartis did in the past.
In conclusion, I would like to make innovation in medical field by creating new drug that cure cancer. This is because most people will get cured from cancer and live longer life, also I would be able to earn a lot of money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...amous drug companies invested more than million dollars in cancer research treatments. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84009546539 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53640565548 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494033412888 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4950206012 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5714285714 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136938051075 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454476104181 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553555708705 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1060461528 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561165919409 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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