There has been discussion about the possibility of maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or Moon but no in Venus because of inhospitable conditions. The lecturer argues that it is possible if we establish a floating balloon instead of a standing sta

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There has been discussion about the possibility of maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or Moon but no in Venus because of inhospitable conditions. The lecturer argues that it is possible if we establish a floating balloon instead of a standing station. While, the author contend that it is not possible to maintain any kind of stations.

The first area of dispute is about the atmospheric pressure. The professor argues that since the pressure is lower up in the air up to 15 kilometers. It is possible that the floating balloon can serve as a station. No danger can be caused. However, this refutes the reading passage which states that the pressure is very high than the pressure at Earth's surface. So, all the spacecraft that have landed on Venus have been crushed.

Another controversial point is the reservoirs of water and oxygen. The professor argues that we can produce water from other chemicals that are already on Venus. So, we don't need to transport these elements. Again, this, contradicts what is stated in the reading passage that since we can’t get water and oxygen would probably defeat the purpose of establishing a permanent station on Venus.

The final argument is about the sunlight that reaches the planet's surface.The professor explains that the sunlight can be reflected and filtered by the station. If it is above the level, and if is below the thick clouds that is considered enough to get sunlight. However, the text ignores these potential explanations that only 40 percent of the sunlight can get through the clouds. It is very little light, so, the lack of light would prevent the use of solar power cell to get electricity to power the machines.

Summing up, the professor presents three arguments to counter the author's claim.

There has been discussion about the possibility of maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or Moon but no in Venus because of inhospitable conditions. The lecturer argues that it is possible if we establish a floating balloon instead of a standing station. While, the author contend that it is not possible to maintain any kind of stations.

The first area of dispute is about the atmospheric pressure. The professor argues that since the pressure is lower up in the air up to 15 kilometers. It is possible that the floating balloon can serve as a station. No danger can be caused. However, this refutes the reading passage which states that the pressure is very high than the pressure at Earth's surface. So, all the spacecraft that have landed on Venus have been crushed.

Another controversial point is the reservoirs of water and oxygen. The professor argues that we can produce water from other chemicals that are already on Venus. So, we don't need to transport these elements. Again, this, contradicts what is stated in the reading passage that since we can’t get water and oxygen would probably defeat the purpose of establishing a permanent station on Venus.

The final argument is about the sunlight that reaches the planet's surface.The professor explains that the sunlight can be reflected and filtered by the station. If it is above the level, and if is below the thick clouds that is considered enough to get sunlight. However, the text ignores these potential explanations that only 40 percent of the sunlight can get through the clouds. It is very little light, so, the lack of light would prevent the use of solar power cell to get electricity to power the machines.

Summing up, the professor presents three arguments to counter the author's claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...nent human presence on Mars or Moon but no in Venus because of inhospitable condit...
^^
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... balloon instead of a standing station. While, the author contend that it is not poss...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...icals that are already on Venus. So, we dont need to transport these elements. Again...
^^^^
Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...nlight that reaches the planets surface.The professor explains that the sunlight ca...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97324414716 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67137628805 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545150501672 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3004648286 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6111111111 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38888888889 7.06452816374 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 4.45695364238 314% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342808309375 0.272083759551 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105471665897 0.0996497079465 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178760877718 0.0662205650399 270% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208150536151 0.162205337803 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.296737036021 0.0443174109184 670% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.3589403974 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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