TOEFL integrated writing: Dutch painter Rembrandt

The points presented in the lecture, agree to the fact that all the points mentioned in the passage are true, but also claim that despie the veracity of these facts, the painting is actually a painting made by Rembrandt himself.These explanations are presented in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, the fur collar that casts doubt on the authenticity of the painting, is believed to be have been painted over the originial painting 100 years later to increase the value of the painting, as it then depicts it to be a portrait of an aristocratic lady. These findings were confrmed by doing the x-ray analysis of the paint pigments of the fur collar and the remaining painting.

Secondly, the lecture also stands by the fact that Rembrandt was indeed the master of light and shadow.As discussed above, the fur collar was added later.When the paint of the fur collar was removed it was observed that the subject of the portrait was wearing a light coloured cloth, which does reflects light.This expalins why the face is not in shadow; thus demystifying the apparent inconsistency.

Lastly, to debunk the contradiction presented by the back panel which is several pieces of wood glued together- the lecturer explains - the size of the panel was increased when the fur collar was painted, this was all done to make the painitng look grand and increase its value.She also says, that the main panel of the painting uses wood from the same tree that is found in other verified works by Remembrandt .

Thus, according to the aforementioned explanations, the painting is indeed an original Remembrandt painting; despite all the reasons o think so otherwise being true too.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02158273381 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78681297015 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557553956835 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 21.2450331126 217% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.120907805 49.2860985944 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 232.666666667 110.228320801 211% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.3333333333 21.698381199 214% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.5 7.06452816374 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0210786202166 0.272083759551 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0103908841484 0.0996497079465 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0151907163869 0.0662205650399 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0124690609781 0.162205337803 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158428698033 0.0443174109184 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.4 13.3589403974 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.25 53.8541721854 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 11.0289183223 182% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.7273730684 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.498013245 194% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.2008830022 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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