The author claims that Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now a part of the YoungTown Wildlife Preserve, based on the premise that -despite only a small percentage of land will be sold to Smith,the proposed development will have disastrous consequences, and there are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit the community of Youngtown which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see the bird population there.
While the message the author is trying to convey is conspicuous, the way he goes about it is flawed. Though at first glance, the argument seems convincing, on closer inspection we can find that the argument is fallacious and riddled with unwarranted assumptions.
The author simply claims that Smith Corporation's plan to build a hotel on a small percentage of land, will only harm the sanctuary.Here the author assumes that despite promising to preserve the sanctuary, Smith Corporation will inadvertently end up doing more harm than good and not live up to their part of the deal.Their is no evidence for the premise of this assumption. Has Smith Corporation in any previous instance shown that they don't keep their promises? Had their been more information to throw light on this assumption, the author's argument would have been more tenable.
The author just assumes that the land being sold to Smith Corporation will be in the heart of the sanctuary, disturbing the environment of 300 bird species. It may so happen that the small patch of land is just on the periphery of the sanctuary, and will in fact be a boon for the tourists to have a hotel so close to the bird park. Had there been more details about the size and the location of the land, the argument would have been more convincing.
Further, the author bluntly puts forth his claim that this sale will not benefit the community; without giving any reasons for this claim. On the contrary, sale will bring in more funds for development, and a good place to sojourn, will attract more tourists.
Thus, while the intentions of the author are pure and he tries to raise advocate against the development of the land that is a part of the wildlife preserve, his argument is untenable.Their is no conclusive information in the passage to espouse his view that Smith Corporations' plans will do nothing but harm the sanctuary.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1909 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.725 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.669 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.713 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...percentage of land will be sold to Smith,the proposed development will have disastro...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Here
...e of land, will only harm the sanctuary.Here the author assumes that despite promisi...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Their
...d not live up to their part of the deal.Their is no evidence for the premise of this ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
...d not live up to their part of the deal.Their is no evidence for the premise of this ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rporation in any previous instance shown that they dont keep their promises? Had ...
^^
Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... any previous instance shown that they dont keep their promises? Had their been mor...
^^^^
Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... to throw light on this assumption, the authors argument would have been more tenable. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 185, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Their
...ife preserve, his argument is untenable.Their is no conclusive information in the pas...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 185, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
...ife preserve, his argument is untenable.Their is no conclusive information in the pas...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, thus, while, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91729323308 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79543124383 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46365914787 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.372128202 57.8364921388 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.5 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.25 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248579400041 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869675767003 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100046810165 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131246448714 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114085258337 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.3799401198 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.3550499002 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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