TOEFL T P O 48 - Integrated Writing Task

Given that the population of frog species declined even some went extinct, there are three ways proposed to protect the frogs' population from declining. Firstly, enacting a law that forbid the use of pesticides where the frogs live, as the pesticides would lead the frog to serious breathing problems as a result of destorying the nervous system. Secondly, killing a kind of fungus with high temperature in that the fugus is the main reason of frogs population declinging. Thirdly, the habitats of frogs should be well protected with sufficeint water. Because the habitats of frogs were threatened by human activities. While the lecturer disproves all of the three ideas as follows.

To begin with, it would not be economical or fair enough for the farmers if they do not use the pesticides which they rely on. Since there would be severe disadvantages for the farmers who woule face a bad harvest of corps.

In addition, it would be very complicated and difficult to kill the fugus. According to the passage, the fungus would make the frogs thick skins,then the frogs would die of dehydration because they could not absorb water through the thick skin. But teh lecturer contends that the treatment of killing frogs could not be settled in groups, instead, every frog would be treated individually and this work should cover generation to generration.

Thirdly, protecting the frogs' habitats with enough water is not the rudimental solution. In that the global warming charges on the disappearing water. Bulding more habitats of frogs is unlikely to protect these species from extinction.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'frogs'' or 'frog's'?
Suggestion: frogs'; frog's
... are three ways proposed to protect the frogs population from declining. Firstly, ena...
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Line 1, column 553, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e well protected with sufficeint water. Because the habitats of frogs were threatened b...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 649, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ctivities. While the lecturer disproves all of the three ideas as follows. To begin wit...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , then
... fungus would make the frogs thick skins,then the frogs would die of dehydration beca...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, even so, in addition, kind of, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 261.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12260536398 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68418629475 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55938697318 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.5471014464 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6428571429 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 7.06452816374 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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