The manager worries about the complaints from the viewers and loss of adevertisements contract from the local business. In the beginning, the manager said it is the increasing tme of national news with declining times of local news and weather report that make some viewer complain about the change. And because of cancelling the advertising contracts with the local business, the television station will suffer the loss from it. So on this ocassion ,the manager suggest that the televsion station should shift the time portion of later-night news and expand them to all of their news programs. There are some problems I need to call into questions.
First of all, the compains from viewers cannot be on be behalf of all the viewer's opinions. Without the mentioning that how many complaints from the viewers and how much portion of these complaints they take in the whole viewers' views, we cannot make the conclusion that all the viewers doesn't like the shift times in late night news. There is a possibility that only a small part of viewers do not like the more national news and less local news, however, others feel like this changing. As we do not know how many compaints recerived by the TV station, there is no obvious proof that this shift is not a wise choice.
What's more, the manager wants to increase the local news and weather report time, it is also arbitrary to make such descision. The author dosen't prove us the previous problem that whether the whole viewers like the shift of times in late night news. With out this reference, we cannnot conclude whether the viewers really like more national news or not, the reason for changing to please some of the viewers who complaints is not a wise choice,too.
Meanwhile , the manager worries about the potential loss from the cancelling to the adevertising contract with local business. Instead of looking for new partener, the manager tends to increase more time of local news and weather report on all the programs. I believe this is the third point which is not a wise choice. With no survey of what we discuss before and intending to expand the program to all Channels of the TV station, I thing it will be dangerous to the whole TV station by doing so. Ths manager should make better plan for the revenue of the TV station.
In conclusion ,the manager's descision by the judgement of some viewers' compaints should be reconsidered, because part of the views do not represent the whole attitudes toward the shift time of programs. With the concern of potential lost in revenue, the manager should make a better survey on the shift times.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2110 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.648 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.409 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.454 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 450, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er the loss from it. So on this ocassion ,the manager suggest that the televsion s...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ake the conclusion that all the viewers doesnt like the shift times in late night news...
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Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs feel like this changing. As we do not know how many compaints recerived by the...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...hat this shift is not a wise choice. Whats more, the manager wants to increase the...
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Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: Without
... the shift of times in late night news. With out this reference, we cannnot conclude whe...
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Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... not, the reason for changing to please some of the viewers who complaints is not a wise ch...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , too
...wers who complaints is not a wise choice,too. Meanwhile , the manager worries abo...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s is not a wise choice,too. Meanwhile , the manager worries about the potential...
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Line 7, column 435, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
...am to all Channels of the TV station, I thing it will be dangerous to the whole TV st...
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Line 9, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...enue of the TV station. In conclusion ,the managers descision by the judgement ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, really, so, third, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79600886918 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48345906286 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421286031042 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3809902917 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.842105263 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327587984321 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113013935598 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811208772818 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203983716986 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869317425339 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.3550499002 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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