TOEFL TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task
In this set materials, the reading passage state that some researchers found fossils from the T.rex animals that show actual tissues and blood vessels of animals. On the other hand, the listening section brings into question the reading points by providing different reasons (and examples).
First of all, the reading passage indicates that some small branch channels are discovered inside the fossils bone that probably shows blood vessels. In contrast, the lecturer opposes this view by mentioning that these soft flexible tissues that discover inside a bone, remain from another animal. Also, some bacteria were lived inside the bone, and they made some hollows in this bone; therefore, these hollows do not show the blood vessels, and they left only from bacteria that live in the bone.
Second, the reading argues that researchers have found some spheres that they think they were red blood cells; conversely, what the professor believes is different. He points that we could not find other spheres particle in other fossils that discovered in the same place. Furthermore, this sphere particle could not blood cells; hence, they maybe remain from reddish minerals.
Finally, according to the reading, scientists have been found some collagens that lived in the bone tissue. However, the speaker claims that collagens cannot live more than 1000 years, and these fossils lived 70-million-years ago. Thus, this collagen does not belong the Tyrannosaurus fossils. They remain from other resources such as the skin of people who discovered or displace the fossils.
- TPO 30 70
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- TPO 20 85
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- Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break: ۱٫ Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 205, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'spheres'' or 'sphere's'?
Suggestion: spheres'; sphere's
... He points that we could not find other spheres particle in other fossils that discover...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38056680162 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39717142784 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562753036437 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5035209522 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.75 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 7.06452816374 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331749989784 0.272083759551 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122937766689 0.0996497079465 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638344593044 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191593295562 0.162205337803 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465283054617 0.0443174109184 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.2367328918 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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