TOEFL TPO 31 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage illustrates that a dinosaur termed Sinosauropteryx did not have feather and the pattern of fine lines remaining in the fossils display another possible and provides some reasons to support the idea. In contrary, the lecturer refutes the claim and presents that the giant creature had apparently feather based on the evidence which all oppose the mentioned reasons in the passage.
First, although the author states that the lines were not remains of a functional structure, however, the professor reveals that feather beautifully can be preserved in fly ash as it has been proved for other dinosaurs based on the remained fossils. This means that the feather structure remained well preserved during the decomposition process after being buried in volcanic ash.
Second, the reading claims that the dine lines are traces of another functioning structure named frills and not feather. Conversely, the speaker opposes the idea by demonstrating that there exist chemical differences between feather and frills. Whereas frills contain a particular protein, feathers do not. According the chemical analysis done on the fossils, it is a convincing evidence that the lines are remains of feather but not frills.
Third, the text posits that the lines are located along backbone and the tail of the ancient animal. This shows that they did not function as feather which is for flight. While, the professor states that function of feathers is not just flight. To put forward her idea, she exemplifies a male bird which has feathers in its backbone. The animal uses the feather for displaying to female animal for mating purpose. Accordingly, the researchers have found it out that the lines in the ancient creature were colorful including white and red colors. Apparently, they were remains of feathers at the backbone of the animal functioning as a displaying structure.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'feathered'.
Suggestion: feathered
...aur termed Sinosauropteryx did not have feather and the pattern of fine lines remaining...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'feathered'.
Suggestion: feathered
... that the giant creature had apparently feather based on the evidence which all oppose ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 33, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... ash. Second, the reading claims that the dine lines are traces of another functioning...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...unction as feather which is for flight. While, the professor states that function of ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, but, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, third, well, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27242524917 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69477611356 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 145.348785872 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544850498339 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5898173498 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 7.06452816374 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375150259482 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118171692736 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707062047044 0.0662205650399 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222757230938 0.162205337803 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034073379322 0.0443174109184 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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