TOEFL TPO 32- Integrated Writing Task
The passage discusses strange noises called quackers. The source of these unfamiliar sounds moves with great speed under the water. The text provides three reasons for the possible sources. However, the professor rejects these reasons and provides others reasons. She tinks the text' reasons are impossible.
First, the passage suggest these soundes belonged to male anf female whales. These animals produce these sounds during their courtship ritual and mating. While, the lecture asserts the mentioned theory in the first look seems possible. But by considering details this reason is impractical. So, she states that whales hold their ritual on the surface of the water. Consequently, the submarines cannot hear these voices.
Second, the text contends that maybe the source of the sounds is a giant squid. Howeve, the professor refutes the idea by explaining that these sounds started in the 1960s and continiuing until the 1980s. While, these giant squids are alwayse present in their area. So, they must always hear these sounds and interrupting is not reasonable. Third, the text describes there is a possibility the source of these sounds is related to the forign submarines. But because they use advanced technology for muting the sounds and hiding the submarine, finding the source of the sounds is hard. The professor rejects this idea by explaining the source of these sounds moves quickly and moving so fast is not practical for a submarine. Furtheremore, there is another reason, changing the direction in fast speed is not an option for a submarine. As a result, the text's reason is false.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...moves with great speed under the water. The text provides three reasons for the pos...
^^^
Line 2, column 154, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ring their courtship ritual and mating. While, the lecture asserts the mentioned theo...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... 1960s and continiuing until the 1980s. While, these giant squids are alwayse present...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, look, may, second, so, third, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20077220077 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52638909923 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53667953668 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3529539907 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.35 110.228320801 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.95 21.698381199 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.15 7.06452816374 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.27373068433 328% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26254947046 0.272083759551 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800102677936 0.0996497079465 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590027343071 0.0662205650399 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166614751509 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587602923653 0.0443174109184 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.99 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.7273730684 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.