TOEFL TPO 43 - Integrated Writing Task

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The passage and the lecture is about a marine animal called agnostids and they elaborated upon the eating habit and dwelling places of agnostids. The passage provides three theories about agnostids whereas the lecturer rebuts these theories by stating these theories to have serious weaknesses.

Firstly, the passage posits that the agnostids were free-swimming predators. The lecturer, however, refutes this theory by stating that predators needs to have larger eyes to clearly see the prey whereas the agnostids had very small eyes and poor vision. In addition, the lecturer states that the agnostids could even be blind. Thus it is not possible for agnostids to be a free-swimming predator.

Secondly, the writer in the passage states another theory that agnostids were seafloor dwellers and lived of by scavanging dead organisms in the sea floor. The lecturer rebuts this point by stating characteristics of seafloor dwellers. She states that sea floor dwellers are not very fast and cannot go very far and stay localized. that's why sea dwelling species of one area are not found in other areas of the ocean. In contrast, the agnostid fossil were found in many area in the sea which means they had spread fast in many areas which in unlikely for seafloor dwellers.

Finally, the passage states another theory about agnostids being a parasitic animal. The lecturer, however, rebuts this point by the stating that parasitic animals have limited population, otherwise it might kill off the host. But, many fossils of the agnostids can be found in the ocean. which provides an evidence that the population of the agnostids were quite large to be a parasitic animal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...that the agnostids could even be blind. Thus it is not possible for agnostids to be ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thats
... cannot go very far and stay localized. thats why sea dwelling species of one area ar...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 333, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... cannot go very far and stay localized. thats why sea dwelling species of one area ar...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 466, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun area seems to be countable; consider using: 'many areas'.
Suggestion: many areas
...rast, the agnostid fossil were found in many area in the sea which means they had spread ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 290, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...he agnostids can be found in the ocean. which provides an evidence that the populatio...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 290, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he agnostids can be found in the ocean. which provides an evidence that the populatio...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, thus, well, whereas, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 272.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18014705882 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.580659765 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474264705882 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7303885777 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9333333333 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381247602985 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14799354488 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690263816723 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245744969065 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545089324808 0.0443174109184 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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