TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiri
The lecture explained why offering employees the option of working 4 days a week would affect companies' profits , economic conditions and the employees life in a negative way for the following reasons.
First of all, A mandatory policy requiring companies to offer the employees a shortened work week, would force the company to hire more workers who require training , health benefits and more office space or more computers, this will increase the company expenses and decrease its profit. This directly refutes the reading passage which states that hiring more staff to ensure that the same amount of work is accomplished will not result in additional cost.
Secondly, In order to avoid spending more money on new employees, the companies might raise their expectation level from the employees, For example, the company might ask the employees to work over time, which may cause more work errors. This refutes the reading passage because employees would feel less rested and less alert which may cause more costly errors.
Thirdly, However, it was mentioned in the reading passage that more free time would increase the employees quality of life.Working only four days a week may have some risks on the employees, For example, It might lower their job stability as well as it might decrease their chances to get an advanced positions, as the company might prefer a full time employee so that the work flow may remain consistent specially in management positions where consistent supervision is needed.
All is all, A mandatory policy may decrease the company profits by increasing the expenses, cause more costly error and affect the employee's work life negatively.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The lecture explained why offering employees the option of working 4 days a week would affect companies' profits , economic conditions and the employees life in a negative way for the following reasons.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to employees and life
Sentence: Thirdly, However, it was mentioned in the reading passage that more free time would increase the employees quality of life.Working only four days a week may have some risks on the employees, For example, It might lower their job stability as well as it might decrease their chances to get an advanced positions, as the company might prefer a full time employee so that the work flow may remain consistent specially in management positions where consistent supervision is needed.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to employees and quality
flaws:
Don't put a space before punctuation marks. Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 271 250
No. of Characters: 1369 1200
No. of Different Words: 148 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.052 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.453 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 38.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.63 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.519 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.855 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ys a week would affect companies profits , economic conditions and the employees l...
^^
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...s profits , economic conditions and the employees life in a negative way for the followin...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nomic conditions and the employees life in a negative way for the following reasons. First ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o hire more workers who require training , health benefits and more office space o...
^^
Line 8, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Working
... increase the employees quality of life.Working only four days a week may have some ris...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 303, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'position'?
Suggestion: position
...crease their chances to get an advanced positions, as the company might prefer a full tim...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 344, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ositions, as the company might prefer a full time employee so that the work flow may rema...
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'as well as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.292517006803 0.261695866417 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.149659863946 0.158904122519 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0816326530612 0.0723426182421 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0510204081633 0.0435111971325 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0238095238095 0.0277247811725 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0816326530612 0.128828473217 63% => OK
Participles: 0.030612244898 0.0370669169778 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56746923025 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0204081632653 0.0208969081088 98% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.115646258503 0.128158765124 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0544217687075 0.0158828679856 343% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204081632653 0.0114777025283 178% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1684.0 1645.83664459 102% => OK
No of words: 272.0 271.125827815 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19117647059 6.08160592843 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371323529412 0.374372842146 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.308823529412 0.287516216867 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213235294118 0.187439937562 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139705882353 0.113142543107 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56746923025 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540441176471 0.539623497131 100% => OK
Word variations: 53.8211616315 53.8517498576 100% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 38.8571428571 21.7502111507 179% => OK
Sentence length SD: 110.184261256 49.3711431718 223% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 240.571428571 132.220823453 182% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 38.8571428571 21.7502111507 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.878197800319 228% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.39072847682 206% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 69.7394957983 50.5018328374 138% => OK
Elegance: 1.80303030303 1.90840788429 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.639016486143 0.549887131256 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.162749108122 0.142949733639 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0286830473017 0.0787303798458 36% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.849607395089 0.631733273073 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150212165228 0.139662658121 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.367463704814 0.266732575781 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831512625189 0.103435571967 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.318694287113 0.414875509568 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0655952565822 0.0530846634433 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.423772529204 0.40443939384 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738504488957 0.0528353158467 140% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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